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poetic mushiness.... Rated Excellent [5 out of 5].

When I was young (wait got to rephrase that am not THAT OLD!)... during my high school and college years I have this habit of just expressing what I feel in writing, when I'm angry, sad, feeling a lil mushy or whatever emotion I am feeling I go get my notebook and pen and go to a quiet place and start scribbling away. Sad to say that notebook is lost and most of my compositions are gone... Also when I graduated from college I seem to have lost the passion for creating such stuffs... So here I am trying to rekindle that long lost passion for creating that literary stuff...

Here is my first piece after a long while, I hope I haven't lost the touch for creating these "stuffs", I haven't got a title so if you like to suggest one just post a comment, also all suggestion and criticism are welcome... here goes nothing...

I dreamt of you last night
And I woke up missing you
You were there in front me
So real I can feel you

Questions lunge at me
Like a rabid wolf stalking its prey
This ordeal is too much for me
Making me crumble down to my knees and pray

Why is it I feel this way
Why can't I have you here to stay
Why do I miss you so much
Why must I suffer such luck

No matter how hard I try
There's no way I can deny
The longing I feel inside
This feeling I just can't hide

When will this come to an end
When all I can do is pretend
When will I have a blissful slumber
When all these wishful thinking tore me asunder

Yet as much as it encumbers me
I long for your apparition
For only in my dreams you are with me
Only in my dreams I can make you my own

I dreamt of you last night
And I woke up missing you
I summon the sandman again to sprinkle his dust once more
So I can fall asleep and be with you evermore...

I hope you enjoy that one... till next Ciao!

 

 

posted on Thursday, September 22, 2005 1:10 PM by naldy

# re: poetic mushiness.... @ Thursday, September 22, 2005 3:29 AM

dad, it sounds like lyrics for a song.. wow. :D

thresca

# re: poetic mushiness.... @ Thursday, September 22, 2005 3:55 AM

You think so then probably it's a sonnet? what's the definition of a sonnet... got any title for this?

naldy

# re: poetic mushiness.... @ Thursday, September 22, 2005 4:02 AM

hah!! it won't pass as a sonnet...
"sonnet - a lyric poem consisting of fourteen lines. In English, generally the two basic kinds of sonnets are the Italian or Petrarchan sonnet and the Shakespearean or Elizabethan sonnet. The Italian/Petrarchan sonnet is named after Petrarch, an Italian Renaissance poet. The Petrarchan sonnet consists of an octave (eight lines) and a sestet (six lines). The Shakespearean sonnet consists of three quatrains (four lines each) and a concluding couplet (two lines). The Petrarian sonnet tends to divide the thought into two parts; the Shakespearean, into four."

naldy

# re: poetic mushiness.... @ Friday, September 23, 2005 2:55 AM

I didn't know sir that there's a poetic side of you hehe...
ayos! :)

How about "Embracing Loneliness" or "The Longing".

I think the latter would be better because it describes a prolonged unfulfilled desire or need.

mjpanes

# re: poetic mushiness.... @ Friday, September 23, 2005 3:19 AM

hehehe thanks mj I'll think about it, as they say don't judge a book if you're not a judge :D just kidding! :D

naldy


 
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